Such as: “Hey Dana.” “Hi” “How you’re doing?” “Ok” “You want some sex?” “Sure” “Me on top?” “Of course”.
Don't take this as criticism (I can't criticise your work, since I haven't read it), but it's not really up to you to decide whether your Major Obutu worked out well - that's something the readers will decide.casperXJ said:I did that with my Marine character, Major Jay Obutu (son of the helmsman in the WC movie), and I think it worked out well, considering that the first Obutu was just a minor character in the WC universe.
Quarto said:the worst fanfics (you know, the kind with super-Dragons piloted with Blair's half-Kilrathi son, commander of the 40 km-long Concordia II[...]).
Not New, I can tell you that much.Lionheart said:What makes a good fanfic?
Death said:Spelling, grammar, plot structure, logic, conformity to the canon, characterization, the works, with a "bonus" of appropriating others' works (characters, settings, etc) without their permission (and then promptly butchering said thefts). Any attempts at reasoning with him, or otherwise pointing out his various lackings (both personal and fanfic-wise) resulted in long, painfully drawn out arguments on WCAC forums, where he tried to claim he was on the staff of some "important" magazine or other (ignoring the fact that his grammar, spelling, and formatting skills were measured with a nice round number: 0).