Hey folks. Having a bit of writers block here. I'm aiming to get my script completed before schoolwork picks up again next week, and I'd like to have my script done by this week so I can begin some preliminary animatics and previsualization.
To all those storytellers out there, maybe you can lend me a hand?
I'm trying to make it sound as militaristic and serious as possible too. I've had comments on the starting introduction to the first two characters as cheesy/cliché, so I will rework that part.
Right now, I currently am trying to think up an ending to my script. Currently it's unfinished and needs an ending. That's where I need help on, but comments and critiques on the rest of my script is also welcome.
If you are to suggest endings, bear in mind that I would like to have the two main characters the heroes of the battle, saving the cargo ships and what's left of their escorts. I would like to keep the number of ships as low but realistic as possible. The Kilrathi are pirates and (hence the name) raiders, therefore they're not there to blow up the cargo ships, only to disable them so they may be gutted.
My aim is a 3-5 minute fully animated video.
My script is at http://www.theartofwu.ca/raiders.doc.
To all those storytellers out there, maybe you can lend me a hand?
I'm trying to make it sound as militaristic and serious as possible too. I've had comments on the starting introduction to the first two characters as cheesy/cliché, so I will rework that part.
Right now, I currently am trying to think up an ending to my script. Currently it's unfinished and needs an ending. That's where I need help on, but comments and critiques on the rest of my script is also welcome.
If you are to suggest endings, bear in mind that I would like to have the two main characters the heroes of the battle, saving the cargo ships and what's left of their escorts. I would like to keep the number of ships as low but realistic as possible. The Kilrathi are pirates and (hence the name) raiders, therefore they're not there to blow up the cargo ships, only to disable them so they may be gutted.
My aim is a 3-5 minute fully animated video.
My script is at http://www.theartofwu.ca/raiders.doc.