Fan fiction excerpt

BlueClaw

Spaceman
Here's a piece of a fanfic that I am writing up. Feel free to post any comments or remarks if you have the time to read it.


The Ralari turned hard to starboard, another explosion ripping through its hull from a concentrated missile impact, moving its bow to face the oncoming Gettysburg-class cruiser. The Ultimatum's laser turrets furiously pelted the Kilrathi destroyer, but the captain had been smart enough to position his ship's strongest facet in the line of fire, where the energy barrage merely smacked and dissipated against strengthened shields. Then the Ralari was kind enough to unleash its own barrage upon the Confederation ship, and space was lit up by red-orange streaks of energy.
It was in this conflicting mass of brutal engagement that Bandit's Raptor heavy fighter spun, rolled, juked and jinked, as energized death pursued him while he himself dealt it out to his enemies. An enemy Krant disappeared in a ball of flame, courtesy of his neutron and mass driver guns, then he snap-rolled to the left to avoid a volley of laser, followed by another Krant that flew through his previously held position.
Bandit vectored to pursue it, holding its tail within his gunsights while his 'burners flared behind him, and fired several rounds of ammo, hitting the craft dead centre in the engine ports. First the shields dropped, then the Krant's aft armour was visibly breached, the fuel tanks igniting and engulfing the fighter in flames.
As he passed through the burning wreckage, he saw from the flank of his canopy the remaining two Krants forming up at least 500 klicks from the Ralari's port side, holding up for one last 'desperate' defence of their home base. Stalling for time was more like it, Bandit mused, while their littermates could join the party. His long-range sensors detected another Ralari and a Fralthi some 100,000 klicks away, rapidly closing. He cursed under his breath as the Ultimatum was stuck engaging the current Ralari warship. This was supposed to have been a quick retreat from the system, but instead had turned into a mousetrap right at the jump point, where the Kilrathi destroyer had suddenly emerged from jumpspace and taken the Ultimatum by surprise. The Ralari was delaying the Ultimatum's retreat long enough for reinforcements to arrive.
"Delta Wing, form on my wing. We've got to focus our attacks on the destroyer's rear. The armour's weakest there." Bandit commanded calmly over the comm.
"Copy, Captain." a Delta Wing pilot responded.
Subsequently, two Raptors formed on Bandit, one for either side. Bandit sighed inwardly. There'd been a fourth pilot, Payday. He hadn't made it. Shaking off his fading grief, Bandit led his wing into action.
"Target remaining missiles for the exhaust ports. Shoot off your cannons once the missiles have hit their target." Bandit ordered as they came within a thousand metres of the Ralari's six.
The wing's missiles were launched almost simultaneously, a sum of three dumbfires, two heat-seekers, and an identification friend-or-foe. With the destroyer already weakened from taking fire on all sides, the wave of missiles easily punched through, exploding on the hull and rupturing coppery-coloured armour plating in a shower of flaming sparks and globules of molten alloy. To add to the destruction, Bandit's wing unleashed a torrent of cannon fire, striking further into the capital ship. The Ralari appeared to shudder for a moment, and then in one mighty burst of fiery calamity, spewed its various pieces of mangled debris in all different directions.
"Good work, Delta Wing. Assume formation on the Ultimatum's left flank." the comm officer's voice crackled over the channel, hinting at a tinge of anxiety over the close call of battle and the adrenaline rush. "Zeta Wing, Phi Wing, form up at the fore. We've got company."
Bandit vectored in his wing on the Ultimatum's port flank, carefully matching speed with the cruiser, and watched as the other wings, comprised mainly of Scimitars and Raptors, formed up only several hundred metres ahead of their mobile base, also matching their speed to that of the cruiser. The radar read that the Fralthi had launched several fighters ahead to deal with the Gettysburg's remaining fighter escort, and Bandit judged from past experience that they would most likely be heavy gunslingers like the Gratha. HE was gratified to find that his instincts had mostly proven correct, but only to a certain extent, as the targeting system identified the first Gratha heavy at a distance of several thousand klicks and closing. Cycling through his targets, he identified a further two Gratha, as well as a pair of Salthi light figthers.
"Stay cool, Delta Wing." Bandit told his wingmen in as stoic a tone as he could manage, presuming that they had become edgy in the agonizing wait for contact with the enemy. "Acquire your targets. Don't be shy to gangtackle them. We'll need the advantage."
The Ralari and the Fralthi were approaching only a few thousand klicks behind the approaching fighters. When the first Salthi came within attack range, Bandit gave the order to break, almost in unison with the other wingleaders. Laser bounced his shields as he accelerated forward into battle, a Salthi zooming towards him with guns flaring wildly. Bandit made short work of it, ending the suicidal charge with a short but deadly triple burst of all guns. The second Salthi had already been dispatched by the time Bandit got around to selecting his next target, the victorious Scimitar pilot hooting over the comm, only to be blown up mere seconds later by a Gratha's IFF missile.
Bandit's target, yet another Gratha currently in the process of flying a torpedo run against the Ultimatum, grew larger and larger within his green crosshairs as Bandit's afterburners roared him to intercept. His first three rounds diminished the Gratha's aft and topside shields, and as he swept past it and came around for another pass, the Kilrathi broke off its torpedo run and pitched up to engage him. A small batch of lights on Bandit's console momentarily sparked and then went out, as his shields were buffeted by a volley of laser and mass driver that struck deep enough to fry into armour plating. Hastily pumping his rounds until his gun's capcitors were drained, Bandit managed to smack through the Gratha's fore shields and reduce it to scrap. As he banked right to assist in the main dogfight, he made a mental note never too try a head-on charge against a heavy fighter in a Raptor again. The Raptor may have deadly firepower, but is shields were definitely nothing to shout about.
The remaining two Grathas were currently busy engaging Zeta, Phi, and Delta wings, and were quickly reinforced by a clutch of Dralthi and a trio of Jalthi, the Ralari and the Fralthi rapidly closing.
A scream pierced his ears from over the comm, and Bandit judged its origin from a Raptor that was in the process of exploding as a Gratha razed it. That had been Wickman, and now another Delta Wing pilot had bit the dust. Hopelessness threatened to overwhelm him, but he forced it down and steeled himself for the battle. If this was his last fight, then he'd take down as many of the furry bastards with him as humanly possible.
Another Scimitar was hit by a Jalthi's six-shooters, sending it in a death roll with no clear direction, smoke trailing behind it. Yet by some miracle, the pilot within the mortally wounded craft had survived the initial impact, and was now struggling to adjust his flight path for the approaching Ralari's bridge, intent on kamikaze action. He never made it, as the Ralari's turrets demolished him within a second.
The enemy task force approached in a swarm with malicious intent, sending ahead missiles and sizzling energy bolts. Then, as they were about to close the gap between themselves and the Ultimatum's defenders, an intense bright light of swirling white-blue energy currents ripped open the void, expanding into a vortex maw that was something akin to a galactic whirlpool. From this bright maw spat forth a sight that stirred Bandit's heart in recognition and relief, and for a moment he though that the illustrious Tiger's Claw had emerged to save the day.

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Then he reminded himself of the bitter reality; the Tiger's Claw had been dead for four years, and had already been a year's dead when he had been assigned to his first tour of duty. The Bengal-class carrier that was currently unloading its guns upon the Kilrathi had its name painted on the side: TCS Unforgiving. As Dralthi and Jalthi exploded or peeled away from the sudden appearance of the Terran carrier, the ship itself began launching fighters two at a time. Rapiers. Raptors.
This new surge of fighter craft lanced into the Kilrathi wave, frying them as they swept past. Bandit swooped into the mighty dogfight, absorbing several enemy blasts before scoring an easy kill by flaming an already weakened Salthi. He jinked and juked as if a man possessed, evading enemy rounds and delivering death blows with astoundingly sharp aim.
The tide of the battle was turning. With the added strength of more than half a dozen state-of-the-art Rapier and mean-as-hell Raptors, along with the surviving defence craft of the Ultimatum, the Confederation pilots began to roll back the Kilrathi offensive. Three of the Unforgiving's Raptors approached the six of a Ralari, firing a salvo of torpedoes and then breaking away, the destroyer shattering violently behind them. Jalthi and Gratha craft fell to the blazing guns of their Terran adversaries, and the Fralthi now found itself on the defensive, its turrets firing wildly in a hopeless attempt to ward off the overwhelming opposition closing in on all sides. Its shields collapsed to the united firepower of both the Unforgiving and the Ultimatum, and small explosions and breaches began to sprout across its hull. A direct laser hit to an unshielded bridge sent the Fralthi spinning slow-motion out of control, its command centre fragged. As if venting its anger at the assault, the entire fore mandible section of the ship split into shards, encouraged by a mighty fireball, and subsequently the reactor ruptured, lighting up the remains and sending odd twisted pieces of hull in random directions.
"Enjoy your trip to hell, kitties!" Bandit said in a low and cold tone, and he saluted the fiery ball that was the remains of the Fralthi.
 
"its still good"? hehe, thats mean

nice writing...but those confed ship names dont like very confed...
Ultimatum and Unforgiven sound more like something out of Star Wars :)
 
Hmm...names like Ultimatum and Unforgiving do sound like something SW Imperialists would use to name their ships. Perhaps I should have reserved such names for the Black Lance?
 
They sure do not sound like the names of Confed vessels. There was a thread in the "General" forum where people gave plenty of carrier name suggestions, perhaps you could take a look at them (I don´t know that thread´s number, perhaps someone does).
 
Man, I'm not too worried by the names, I like them, but the point made is a good one.

Anyway cool story man.:)

Think I might try a story or two myself now...:D
 
Yeah, have you ever noticed in the books and games what Imperials name their Star Destroyers?

Dominant
Death's Head
Avenger
Implacable
Virulence
Avarice
Vengeance


While the Rebel's choose happy names!

Liberty
Alleigance
Emancipator
Tyrant's Bane


Though the British did use a few names like the Imperials would use in WWII.
 
Originally posted by Darth Thrakhath
Though the British did use a few names like the Imperials would use in WWII.
Hehe, I'm pretty sure that's the other way round :p. Also, the British have used such names prior to WWII too, and are still using them now. They simply have a different naming tradition compared to the US.
 
You know what? The USN has the crappiest names for ships. Why not something cool? Most of the ships are named after dead people no ones ever heard of. I mean, there are dozens of names that you could pull from myths and what not, but instead you name them after dead people.

I don't have anything against the dead people.
 
What's wrong with naming ships after dead people? And the Navy doesn't simply name the ships after any poor sap who bit the dust, they usually name the ships after war heros or Presidents.
 
War Heroes no ones ever heard of. In WC, everyone would know who the TCS Christopher Blair is named after, because of all the propaganda, but no one would know who the USS Dead Person was named after. Everyone knows who the Red Baron is, but who knows and Allied fighter pilot? [Eddie Rickenbacker]

Presidents work because everyone knows them, but to a normal person [like me], I have no clue who they're naming ships after.
 
So what if you've never heard of them. That's not the point. The point is to honor people who died serving the country.
 
I think there's some psychology stuff in there too.

After all, which sounds more intimidating?

"Captain! The Rodger Young is closing in!"
or
"Captain! The Malice is closing in!"

Malice is a much more threatening word.

Dig it.
 
*Thinks back to WC3-days* Kilrathi radar-dude: "Kalralahr, it's the Victory!"
... How intimidating. If a ship has a fearsome reputation, it could intimidate people even if it was called Lambchop.
 
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