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Anytime. 7. Well I worked it out from the 130,000km, and 16mins (960secs) travel at 240kps. See, in 16mins the enemy will have travelled 230,400km. To keep your 130,000km spacing, the convoy must have covered an additional 100,400km in those same 16mins. Thus the speed of 100,400/960 =...

To my surprise it all fit in one post. Maybe be a clipboard size thing. I know I'm turning it into a circus...so shoot me. Incidentally the second bit wasn't meant to happen - it just did.

2681.036.2022 - At Long Last A cheerful twitter resounded from the control panel. Alerted, Nathan examined his display. "Sir," he faced the Captain, "Perry Naval Base is within radar range. At our current speed, we should reach it in under 7 minutes." Thomas nodded silently, frowning...

Lets see... <OL TYPE=1> <LI>&gt;I don’t know when it started exactly, probably because there was no single incident or person that can be blamed.&lt; - First sentence...Didn't have to look far. Actually I find most starts are a little rough. The sentence is a bit awkward, how about something...

Finally read it... <OL TYPE=1> <LI>&gt;Daniel Wilford, formally a Vice Admiral&lt; + &gt;now a Captain again&lt; - Quite a demotion. <LI>&gt;Seven hundred years since the discovery of penicillin&lt; - Penicillin was discovered in 1981? <LI>&gt;on any ship, even relatively harmless viruses had...

Just backtracking to this. <OL TYPE=1> <LI>&gt;Nevertheless, I am going to the second closest ship, so I will probably see some action in this little ordeal.&lt; - Meep! Changing from third to first person is risky business. <LI>&gt;It seemed that everytime a war stops, another starts.&lt; -...

3. Nope - but I'm not your English teacher. 8. Yes, though the comma is expendable. As to the hobby comment. I know you were joking, so don't mind my reply. Keep writing and enjoy it.

7. Er, I believe the spelling is trauma, as in accident trauma. As per the sig, it's not the content but the amount of content. 6 lines of sig per post just seems a lot to me...especially since you see it every post.

<OL TYPE=1> <LI>&gt;helped out alot,&lt; - A lot again. <LI>&gt;After he had his CI Number entered, and a password typed in, Fireball saved the information, and told him how to get to his room, and how to use the new style of locks.&lt; - I have to agree with Nighthawk - too many ands...

<OL TYPE=1> <LI>&gt;This is the COS KnightFall,&lt; - Not a mistake, just a query - What's COS? <LI>&gt;a ship materialized in from of the bridge&lt; - In front of the bridge. <LI>&gt;I"m coming from my quarters&lt; - Apostrophe, not quote. <LI>&gt;Nintey meters long,&lt; - Ninety? That would...

I thought I already posted this, but it looks like I didn't so here it is. Yes well I meant 5am and I'm awake of course. 3. Better, though I'd have removed it. *shrug* 4. My point exactly. The comma is bad, the semi-colon even worse. 8. No way. Yummers is a far more refined term than...

5. 29. Yeah I've noticed that too. It's too damn easy to misinterpret casual written stuff. 32. IRL = In Real Life 46. Aparently so are the Aussies. 48. That's why I'm picking mine off one by one. Hey, no need for apologies - we all have days like that. Hope to see the next chapter...anytime.

Primarch: I agree about the thesaurus thing but there is nothing wrong with getting a little poetic once in a while - as long as the reader gets the picture. As per Quarto's story, he had posted the earlier chapters before, but they underwent some rewriting. Dralthi5: I'm not done with you...

1. A forced line break. I've changed it to three hard spaces. 2. I've thought of that but since this story is still in development I prefer to use numbers to see where they come up. 3. They talked all through their night shift after the first Retro attack. 4. What? Stars have eyes too.

GRR! This stupid thing still posts upside down, and this post doesn't fit in a single post so I've split it up into two separate topics. [This message has been edited by Matrix (edited March 21, 2000).]

2681.035.1054 - Palan With a bright flash, the CES Icarus entered Palan. As she drifted out of the pulsating jump sphere, two wings of Weasels circled either side of the vessel. On board, Captain Harvey and Major Gratke watched the formation from the bridge. “Welcome to Palan, Icarus. We...

Tire yourself out? <OL TYPE=1> <LI>&gt;behest&lt; + &gt;vehemence&lt; - Yeesh! I have nothing against your vast vocabulary, but it would be nice to read a chapter of your story without the need to reach for a dictionary. <LI>&gt;voice of the women&lt; - Singular, woman. <LI>&gt;I quit high...

*yawn* Is it 5am...again? <OL TYPE=1> <LI>&gt;the corvette; the Broadsword&lt; - Maybe a fullstop? <LI>&gt;Surely, the Kamekh could go for a few hours without escort&lt; - Sounds like they were away for a few hours. <LI>&gt;It was quite a tough problem,&lt; - Consider changing or removing...

The return of the nitpicker. <OL TYPE=1> <LI>&gt;A carrier landing was always the most difficult things a combat pilot ever had to accomplish.&lt; - Thoughts getting ahead of your writing? You must've been thinking of "was the most difficult thing" and "was one of the most difficult things"...

*churr*, over.